The piano - the 3rd paragraph of my story

BANG!! CRASH!! Gunshots. His brother and him ran against a smashed, burnt wall for cover. Then Henry (the brother) peaked out and was going to shoot someone but he was one second too late to release the trigger... BANG!! Henry got shot in the chest. The old man tried to remove the bullet but he failed and these words were the last. "Save yourself." Henry said quietly. Then he passed away in his arms. "Noooo!" he cried "Why him?

By LS. Year 5